While i was reading Angela's DeSarro's final product, i can't seem to get pass that her flow of writing was a bit choppy- meaning that, she lacked transitional words in creating that smooth stream of thought. In addition, I believe that if Angela added more vivid descriptions about Debbie's sickly condition, then she might have achieve additional support in sustaining her argument; thus, creating a persuasive influence. Additionally, i feel that she needed more evidence and reasoning to firmly ensure that her audience is persuaded.Therefore, i feel that her support foundation was a bit weak to win over the argument.
Consequently, i would have done a completed the process differently.
See you all in class!
Consequently, i would have done a completed the process differently.
See you all in class!
Her essay did confuse me a bit but it was interesting.
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ReplyDeleteI too, agree.
ReplyDeleteYou have great writing skills.
ReplyDeleteGood Job!
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